Thursday, March 20, 2008

Carefree



hand-in-hand
we walked down the vale
and climbed on the fence
across from the forlorn rail track:
to simper and wave or throw a flying-kiss
at the passengers on the train
that whiz by every noon -
chugging a melody,
tripping our soul.

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In response to the prompt from Friday Fives

15 comments:

paisley said...

there is something so adventurous about trains... i have always said someday i want to go somewhere far a way luxuriously by train... not in a seat,, but with a compartment and all of that... i wonder if they still have travel trains like that???? i am going to find out right now....

UL said...

oh i adore trains. oh yes there are still trains like the ones you mention...i just love them so much..

noahthegreat said...

The form and the words are beautiful.

lissa said...

the last line is just wonderful - tripping our soul - sounds like a fun adventure.

Michelle Johnson said...

You've conjured beautiful images here and made me want to travel by train also. We have a train station here in town but, you would have to travel at night. I would want to travel by day. That way you could see everything passing by your window. Thanks for sharing. Have a nice day tomorrow.

gautami tripathy said...

The title so very apt!

:D

watered down

tumblewords said...

Ah, this is a lovely memory. Trains were always so exciting - freedom on a track. Nice post!

Mariacristina said...

Our souls do trip when passengers wiz past us. I wonder where they're going, what link of lives they have. Sometimes it bothers me that I'll never know...

I've travelled in a train with a compartment many times. Usually it was second class. The beds fold down at night, with three bunks on one side, three on the other. It was kind of weird to be sleeping near strangers, but I was young, and took it in stride.

Once I had my own private compartment. I felt so spoiled!

Roop Rai said...

ah that was so beautifully done. could i please request you to pen some lines for unchaahi? :)

Leigh Lear said...

very nice

Russell Ragsdale said...

I agree with everyone, trains are just amazing. The are a fabulous way to get around Europe but they get a little dodgy when you use them in my part of the world. Great job!

Whitesnake said...

GOOD GOD woman........
No post since Thursday....????
How am I to survive?


Hmmmm!

OneMoreBeliever said...

it's like sharing a sunny day in our youth enjoying the moment and gathering memories..it is beautiful

Bone said...

There is something romantic to me about trains. I picture it twisting thru a sleepy, perfect countryside. You capture it well.

keith hillman said...

This is so emotive. I felt I was there with you