Sunday, April 6, 2008

Stranded 'kus!



forest fire:
lone bird in the sky-
stranded high.
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gathering storm:
burdened thoughts at war-
stranded within.

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flowing stream:
calms the inner soul-
happily stranded.

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clear blue sky:
merry making birds-
stranded hearts.

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In response to the prompt from On Single Impression

20 comments:

Just someone said...

That is so cool, you are on a roll today - liked both of them... great job on keeping on going...

Pam said...

I really like the first poem. Nice and concise; you painted a simple but powerful picture.

qualcosa di bello said...

your second speaks so clearly to how my mind seems to work...sometimes i really feel stranded within myself when i am in turmoil.

SandyCarlson said...

Stranded can be a good or a bad experience depending on the circumstances surrounding that imposed solitude. Beautifully done.
Writing in Faith: Poems

andrée said...

An bird stranded by fire must be one of the most heart-breaking things I could possibly see.

Raven said...

Nicely done... I especially like the first two.

Vixen said...

They are all really great. The line burdened thoughts at war truly fits how I was feeling tonight.

gautami tripathy said...

All are good!

collected clutters

Rose said...

Your poems are so good. You're so talented.

Patois said...

I do love how you are able to make stranded be a good thing as well as (how I always think of it) a bad thing.

tumblewords said...

The first one is powerful, indeed. All are so very nice!

keith hillman said...

Simply brilliant. How do you do it?

christine said...

This poem would work for Michelle's Monday Mural too.

I like how each image from each stanza seems to balance the one before it. I tend to gravitate toward the peaceful images.

Michelle Johnson said...

I'm glad you stopped by because all four of these are really good. There's a certain clarity we can all carry away from this experience. Nicely done. Have a nice day.

paisley said...

i am so glad you decided to join us over at poefusion.. i just know you would love some of the prompts we do over there... this was lovely as usual UL....

Teri C said...

Each one is just wonderful.

paisley said...

very nice.. every one...

one more believer said...

i luv how u used stranded...

Greyscale Territory said...

Perspectives of being stranded has been offered so musically.

The beauty of seeing many sides of one single impression.

Gemma

storyteller said...

I’m glad I happened upon your ‘stranded’ poems today while clicking through the OSI feed in Google Reader. Somehow I missed your post while using the Mr. Linky earlier today. Each is wonderfully poignant!

I’m late to visit because ‘life’ got in the way, but I did publish two ‘week 6’ posts for One Single Impression: Stranded ... one on each of my blogs on Wednesday of last week and I hope you’ll find time to visit. They’re here: Heliocopter Rescue and Polar Bears
Hugs and blessings,