Dusk dim and shimmer into night
Red glows from cigarette light
Two lads gaze up at the sky
Young dreams can afford to fly
Miles and three quarters away
Fireflies dance and sashay
Two men curse away the dark
Old eyes betray their walk
Lads turned men, they wonder when
Miles just seemed so long then.
Red glows from cigarette light
Two lads gaze up at the sky
Young dreams can afford to fly
Miles and three quarters away
Fireflies dance and sashay
Two men curse away the dark
Old eyes betray their walk
Lads turned men, they wonder when
Miles just seemed so long then.
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In response to the prompt from 3WW
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22 comments:
I love the picture you posted, it goes so well with the passage of time in your poem.
Rose
xo
Nice descriptive comparison between young and old.
Dear UL - I am moved by how beautifully you have used three such unrelated words. I'm just discovering 3WW. This will be fun to participate in from time to time. Annie
How beautiful and what a different take on cigarettes
I'm a woman, not old I hope
and wonder when miles stopped seeming so long
This is gorgeous, Ul!
this was beautiful... and let me tell you ,, it sneaks up on you like a thief in the night... i never would have believed it.....
Two lads gaze up at the sky
Young dreams can afford to fly
Love that. Beautiful.
And I really liked how you told a tale of them aging, in a round-about wait that kept us wondering.
Oh, I love it! Time and the young are soon parted!
Enjoyed reading that, the picture further set the reflective and dark atmosphere...smoke rising from red ends.
This is excellent! The dreams of youth seem as infinite as the night sky. Beautiful poem.
beautiful..
Wow...
How very poignant for me. I recently related a dream I had about my best friend, who died of cancer in 1987, to a coworker. I told her about the dreams we used to have of our friendship, families, business, double wedding, etc., and how I still miss him.
I'm going to save this...and post about it, with full credit to you.
Thank you for this lovely, meaningful work.
Oh my, this is excellent, UL! From youth to longing for youth. Loved the last line best of all.
beautifully written! :))
Bugga!
Everyone else has taken my comments and posted them........
**** Sigh!****
I like the rhyming..:D
Beautiful words to age by, UL. You have captured the essence of youth and growing old so well in your poem. Keep up the good work.
A fascinating look at growing older... ;)
I'm there with them.....
lovely poem
Ohhh love this UL, just gorgeous!
Love the word "sashay"!
I feel the same way quite often when I'm out walking at night.
Oh my!!! how beautiful...makes me want to take a walk at night :D
Lads turned men, they wonder when
Miles just seemed so long then.
hmmm...
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