Wednesday, November 28, 2007

Time flies!



Dusk dim and shimmer into night
Red glows from cigarette light

Two lads gaze up at the sky
Young dreams can afford to fly

Miles and three quarters away
Fireflies dance and sashay

Two men curse away the dark
Old eyes betray their walk

Lads turned men, they wonder when
Miles just seemed so long then.


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In response to the prompt from 3WW
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22 comments:

Rose Dewy Knickers said...

I love the picture you posted, it goes so well with the passage of time in your poem.

Rose

xo

lissa said...

Nice descriptive comparison between young and old.

AnnieElf said...

Dear UL - I am moved by how beautifully you have used three such unrelated words. I'm just discovering 3WW. This will be fun to participate in from time to time. Annie

pia said...

How beautiful and what a different take on cigarettes

I'm a woman, not old I hope
and wonder when miles stopped seeming so long

Jo said...

This is gorgeous, Ul!

paisley said...

this was beautiful... and let me tell you ,, it sneaks up on you like a thief in the night... i never would have believed it.....

TC said...

Two lads gaze up at the sky
Young dreams can afford to fly


Love that. Beautiful.

And I really liked how you told a tale of them aging, in a round-about wait that kept us wondering.

tumblewords said...

Oh, I love it! Time and the young are soon parted!

Jujee said...

Enjoyed reading that, the picture further set the reflective and dark atmosphere...smoke rising from red ends.

Herb Urban said...

This is excellent! The dreams of youth seem as infinite as the night sky. Beautiful poem.

LittleWing said...

beautiful..

Carlos said...

Wow...

How very poignant for me. I recently related a dream I had about my best friend, who died of cancer in 1987, to a coworker. I told her about the dreams we used to have of our friendship, families, business, double wedding, etc., and how I still miss him.

I'm going to save this...and post about it, with full credit to you.

Thank you for this lovely, meaningful work.

Bone said...

Oh my, this is excellent, UL! From youth to longing for youth. Loved the last line best of all.

Lucy said...

beautifully written! :))

Steve said...

Bugga!
Everyone else has taken my comments and posted them........

**** Sigh!****

gautami tripathy said...

I like the rhyming..:D

Michelle Johnson said...

Beautiful words to age by, UL. You have captured the essence of youth and growing old so well in your poem. Keep up the good work.

Rob Kistner said...

A fascinating look at growing older... ;)

Awareness said...

I'm there with them.....

lovely poem

Redness said...

Ohhh love this UL, just gorgeous!

Linda said...

Love the word "sashay"!

I feel the same way quite often when I'm out walking at night.

Thinking aloud said...

Oh my!!! how beautiful...makes me want to take a walk at night :D

Lads turned men, they wonder when
Miles just seemed so long then.
hmmm...