My initial response,
As the knocker knocks,
Was to seek and hide,
Then peek outside.
I crouch and curl,
And make the crawl,
Away from the devil,
Toward the wall.
Over my shoulder,
I glimpse the door,
It shakes and rocks,
A thought occurs.
As the knocker knocks,
Was to seek and hide,
Then peek outside.
I crouch and curl,
And make the crawl,
Away from the devil,
Toward the wall.
Over my shoulder,
I glimpse the door,
It shakes and rocks,
A thought occurs.
"How long will it hold?
Before the weather floods inside!"
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In response to the prompt from 3WW
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13 comments:
Good use of the three words. I felt your weather.
Thank you Jo.
I liked the peeking outside!
The unknown weather can be scary at times.
This had a nice rhythm.
Thanks much, Gautami and Lissa
This is cool! I like the rhymes and the fun wording like "as the knocker knocks" and "seek and hide". Our house was knocking the other night from a storm -- it definitely felt like this!
:)
Love the second stanza
Very nice rhythm. The rhyming helped it flow.
I agree. Great rhythm. And how we "hide" from the weather is very relatable.
nice use of rhyme, particularly enjoyable reading it out aloud.
Thanks everyone for your kind words. I have a feeling that I will be adding to it some more...words are popping up in my mind.
I do hide from the weather so I relate very much--and there was a day this week when it felt as if the rain was going to flood my bedroom
I hide from the weather all the time, so I understand well.
P.S. Sorry I didn't get here any sooner: I had to finish mine before reading everyone else's!
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