Wednesday, October 10, 2007

Knock-Knock!


My initial response,
As the knocker knocks,
Was to seek and hide,
Then peek outside.

I crouch and curl,
And make the crawl,
Away from the devil,
Toward the wall.

Over my shoulder,
I glimpse the door,
It shakes and rocks,
A thought occurs.

"How long will it hold?
Before the weather floods inside!"

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In response to the prompt from 3WW
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13 comments:

Jo said...

Good use of the three words. I felt your weather.

UL said...

Thank you Jo.

gautami tripathy said...

I liked the peeking outside!

lissa said...

The unknown weather can be scary at times.

This had a nice rhythm.

UL said...

Thanks much, Gautami and Lissa

Clare said...

This is cool! I like the rhymes and the fun wording like "as the knocker knocks" and "seek and hide". Our house was knocking the other night from a storm -- it definitely felt like this!
:)

RomanceWriter said...

Love the second stanza

Rae Trigg said...

Very nice rhythm. The rhyming helped it flow.

Bone said...

I agree. Great rhythm. And how we "hide" from the weather is very relatable.

Jujee said...

nice use of rhyme, particularly enjoyable reading it out aloud.

UL said...

Thanks everyone for your kind words. I have a feeling that I will be adding to it some more...words are popping up in my mind.

pia said...

I do hide from the weather so I relate very much--and there was a day this week when it felt as if the rain was going to flood my bedroom

TC said...

I hide from the weather all the time, so I understand well.

P.S. Sorry I didn't get here any sooner: I had to finish mine before reading everyone else's!