best friends for life
turn worst of enemies
story of life
turn worst of enemies
story of life
breaking rules
tangled in treachery –
daring egos
one dead, the other jailed
judge understood-
simple theory, money involved
self-created prisoners
separated beyond lifetimes
simple theory, money involved
self-created prisoners
separated beyond lifetimes
forever regrets
*****
In response to the prompt from 3WW.
A couple of lines rewritten and the poem reordered.
Concept remains the same. Money equates to mess in
most cases.
20 comments:
A most tangled web to be sure. :)
Rose
xo
What is it that makes people do that kind of thing? How do people lose perspective in such a dramatic way?
Constructive criticism (since your "leave a comment" blurb says you like it): No apostrophe required on "friends" in the first line.
thanks pjd, removed :)
Think it's easy to lose perspective--though I don't understand turning to violent crime
I wrote two--the second one is better I think
Looking for love
Money is just not - ever - straight forward. Maybe we should ban it!
You told the story so well!
Money's a hard thing to do right! Nice post!
very true words UL....
wonderful piece...made me a bit sad.
friends + money = disaster. Always.
UL,
True, money like electricity, must be handled carefully or the bite may be deadly.
rel
I thought it was going a different direction but still the point is there.
So true and so well said, as always ;)
yess money does weave a tangled web around us...
unfortunately it is understood only by a few, on time...
its funny all 3 words came up in the comment too...the first 2 werent intentional...but when i noticed that, i thought i would complete it by adding the last one too...
prompt well taken wrapped in a beautiful imagery of words..uve well explained the harsh truth of life :)
Tangled, for sure!
arched architecture
really liked your poem... especially the first two and last two lines...
A well-crafted poem!
separated beyond lifetimes
forever regrets
Loved those lines, especially, UL.
Have a great weekend!
You were early, I was late :)
I really liked this, even as I found it very sad that "best of friends" could end up like that. Money is not worth it. But then, I don't think any of the things that generally end friendships are.
this was so sad, as I once had a best friend who is no longer. No jail time or death thankfully but still... great post.
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