Friday, February 1, 2008

A Foul Deal!



Chewed on cherry, his tread weary

Discard the jacket, load the packet
Key in the ignition, full of trepidation
A brunt, a grunt and then a crack
Fearful and afraid to back track

Out pops the worry, late for the ferry.


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In response to the prompt from Friday Fives,
also fits the prompt from Sunday Scribblings.
ah cheating here, but this fits Weekend Wordsmith too.
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22 comments:

tumblewords said...

Fun post. Late for the ferry - who would have guessed! Like it!

LittleWing said...

whadda poop of a deal...awesome post 2 the prompt!!!

paisley said...

sometimes i think you should combine your love for children and your written words... i bet you could write some lovely children's poetry... this one is full of the proper spark for that!!!!

watermaid said...

I love a surprise ending. I like the line 'a brunt, a grunt and then a crack'.

Michelle Johnson said...

Didn't see the missed ferry coming. That's the way a bad day can start. Have a nice weekend.

Lucy said...

love this play with words. your foul was anything but! :)

AnnieElf said...

Hi UL. Reading this introduced me to Friday Five. I immediately grabbed the words. THANKS for the inspiration.

keith hillman said...

Loved it to bits you clever poet you!

noahthegreat said...

Hate when that happens; I actually missed the bus this morning, and some other kid's mom raced through traffic to get me to another one.

Redness said...

VERY Clever! Loved it!

Steve said...

Very Clever.

Robin said...

Great twist with the ending.

anthonynorth said...

Nice touch. Though I'm not really pleased when late for real.
Must dash ...

Lea said...

great piece... I'm catching up on all I've been missing here and greatly enjoying myself... thank you!

Chris said...

Much big fun!

myrtle beached whale said...

very clever and original post.

gautami tripathy said...

You did well for both.

fouled up, have you?

Herb Urban said...

"a brunt, a grunt and then crack"

Sounds like a visit to the chiropractor is in his future. FGun read!

Marja said...

What a happy sparkling poem. Like the end late for the ferry

Thinking aloud said...

hey clever play with the words...how do you do it? :)

susan said...

I was thinking the same as paisley. The whimsy of the poem made me wonder how'd you do with children's poetry.

Just Jen said...

Oh that's cute! I like cherry! Haven't by in awhile and I missed ya!