Monday, January 7, 2008

Moon-like Beauty!



Moon, fair-like-
Depict a woman’s beauty
In my culture.

Tantalizing -
Her curves firm and supple
Like the elusive moonlight.

Soft and milky white
Her skin attracts the eye -
A moon on the clear lit sky.

Eyes play hide and seek
Hither-tether, appear-disappear
Like the moon and cloud peer.

Secretive and mysterious
Not unlike the distant moon
She leaves you wanting more.
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In response to the prompt from One Deep Breath
PS: "Like the moon behind the clouds" was changed to
"Like the moon and cloud peer".
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21 comments:

Sandy said...

Very very nice. Your haiku roll one into the other...nicely done.

tumblewords said...

I really like this - lots of wisdom and a little myth mixed in for good measure. Nice!

AnnieElf said...

Soft and milky white
Her skin attracts the eye

These two lines really worked for me. This is what keeps me gazing on a bright full moon. Lovely analogy.

Crafty Green Poet said...

I enjoyed reading this.

Just Jen said...

Beautifully written...like a mythical story in dreams far away....

Just Jen said...

not sure my first comment went through...so beautifully written...like a mythical creative from a far away land....(i think that's what I said...same idea...lol)

Sandy Carlson said...

Truly, she tantalizes us!
Writing in Faith

Plain Foolish said...

Lovely. It reminds me of some of my favorite stories.

get zapped said...

I love how these truly capture the lure, beauty and mystery of sister moon.

lissa said...

I like the comparison between women and the moon. Nicely done.

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Ps said...

beautifully said and nice analogies drawn.I love the moon too.

qualcosa di bello said...

what a stunning analogy!

Brian said...

Thanks for visiting and for your comments for Blessing.

I like the first two haiku, they have a bitter edge.

paisley said...

what a beautiful string of moon lit pearls!!!! the last is my favorite!!!!

Roswila said...

Soft and milky white
Her skin attracts the eye -
A moon on the clear lit sky.

I particularly like the above.

Secret Agent Mama said...

Every single one is better than the previous, if that's even possible.. They are all righteous!

spacedlaw said...

Great series. I prefer indeed how you have edited that line.

writerwoman said...

Love that last three lines the most. Lovely, lovely work.

Thanks for taking part in PWB's World Poetry Carnival.

STP said...

Some of the comments touch on what I'd say. I find this piece mythically and sensual.

Christine said...

I see a woman dancing under the moonlight - beautiful images.