Saturday, December 8, 2007

Telly Moments



Ghostly sitings within the moat,
destabilized my mind elastic.
Terror strikes and notorious activity,
seared my skin with bone numbing chill

Frightening silence, horror filled
Dreadful, yet eyes captivated.
Dinner preps midway, moment halted.
Caught in the drama, heart captured.

Piano strikes, mustard spilt.
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In response to the prompt from Friday Fives
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8 comments:

poefusion said...

I love this. The rhythm is very smooth. Love the use of moat and how you transitioned into elastic. Wonderful use of the Friday 5. Keep up the good work. Have a nice weekend.

Anonymous said...

Ul, I love how you brought us to the piano and mustard.

Marcia

gautami tripathy said...

I agree with marcia. You did well.


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Christine Swint said...

This sounds like a scene from a scary silent movie! You created an intense moment.

lissa said...

It seem to be the emotions of someone watching a scary movie in the dark with the covers up to their eyes.

"Dreadful, yet eyes captivated" - my favorite line

Tumblewords: said...

I'd sure like to know what was in the moat! Nice piece with strong words and images...

paisley said...

i just totally love "mind elastic"... that is awesome... very nice write!!!!!

little wing writer said...

wow...i agree w/everything everybody has sed...everything abt it..and the way you brought the last line home...perfect...