My phone lost signal -
Chilly night turned windy,
I stumble across the rubble.
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Windy and creepy outside-
I stumbled in through the door,
The phone rings.
***
I answer the phone,
Silence stumble over an eerie noise-
Curtains whoosh in the windy air.
***
Phone drops dead –
I stumble backward,
Into the windy night outside.
Chilly night turned windy,
I stumble across the rubble.
***
Windy and creepy outside-
I stumbled in through the door,
The phone rings.
***
I answer the phone,
Silence stumble over an eerie noise-
Curtains whoosh in the windy air.
***
Phone drops dead –
I stumble backward,
Into the windy night outside.
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In response to the prompt from 3WW
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16 comments:
Phones lose signals and people stumble backward. Very true
Very fitting for Halloween!
I liked the repetitive build of this somewhat scary poem. You done really well here. Keep up the good work.
Have a nice day.
Michelle
I like! You do great at these 3WW prompts. Happy Halloween!
Oh I didn't find that funny at all!
I hate that thing where you get the phone and there's silence - cold-calling or whatever it is - sinister.
I love the revisited words. I read it twice, and my imagination tried to fill in dastardly deeds or bad news or drug-induced paranoia. Very versitile.
~S
well i think it sounds like a definite opener to a great story!!!!
Spooky words! Happy Halloween!
Each one is good, but together they are really eerie.
I like all the repetition in this, and especially the line:
Silence stumble over an eerie noise-
Very effective. Nice work!
Mad Kane
Seems like these words did have a bit of a spooky feel this week, huh? You captured that.
***silence stumble over an eerie noise*** well put... I like it...
...and thanx for the encouragment :)
Very nice!
I'm always afraid I'm going to answer the phone upstairs and someone is going to answer at the same time downstairs, when I thought I was alone!
This reminded me of that :)
Thank you so much for the comments, very encouraging, I must admit.
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