Wednesday, October 31, 2007

Ring-Ring



My phone lost signal -
Chilly night turned windy,
I stumble across the rubble.
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Windy and creepy outside-
I stumbled in through the door,
The phone rings.
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I answer the phone,
Silence stumble over an eerie noise-
Curtains whoosh in the windy air.
***
Phone drops dead –
I stumble backward,
Into the windy night outside.

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In response to the prompt from 3WW
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16 comments:

pia said...

Phones lose signals and people stumble backward. Very true

RomanceWriter said...

Very fitting for Halloween!

Michelle Johnson said...

I liked the repetitive build of this somewhat scary poem. You done really well here. Keep up the good work.

Have a nice day.
Michelle

charlotta-love said...

I like! You do great at these 3WW prompts. Happy Halloween!

Truefaith1963 said...

Oh I didn't find that funny at all!
I hate that thing where you get the phone and there's silence - cold-calling or whatever it is - sinister.

Shephard said...

I love the revisited words. I read it twice, and my imagination tried to fill in dastardly deeds or bad news or drug-induced paranoia. Very versitile.

~S

paisley said...

well i think it sounds like a definite opener to a great story!!!!

tumblewords said...

Spooky words! Happy Halloween!

sister AE said...

Each one is good, but together they are really eerie.

Marcia (MeeAugraphie) said...

I like all the repetition in this, and especially the line:

Silence stumble over an eerie noise-

Mad Kane said...

Very effective. Nice work!
Mad Kane

TC said...

Seems like these words did have a bit of a spooky feel this week, huh? You captured that.

Thinking aloud said...

***silence stumble over an eerie noise*** well put... I like it...

...and thanx for the encouragment :)

Carlos said...

Very nice!

Bone said...

I'm always afraid I'm going to answer the phone upstairs and someone is going to answer at the same time downstairs, when I thought I was alone!

This reminded me of that :)

UL said...

Thank you so much for the comments, very encouraging, I must admit.